Some people think that real life skills like cooking, housekeeping and gardening should be included in the curriculum as compulsory subjects? Do you agree or disagree? Explain your opinion, using specific reasons and details.
Many individuals feel that basic
life
abilities like cooking, housecleaning and gardening should be added in
the curriculum as mandatory courses . I Change preposition
to
am fully agree
with the given statement . According to my Change the verb form
fully agree
perspective
it should be Add a comma
,perspective
teach
in the Change the form of the verb
taught
school
for learning this
Correct determiner usage
these
skills
to enhance knowlege
.
To commence with , Correct your spelling
knowledge
subjects
plays
a crucial role in Correct subject-verb agreement
play
students
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students'
student's
school
life
. There are many academic subjects
which childerns
have to learn to overcome with them . Correct your spelling
children
Firstly
, pupils focus on the main courses rather than curriculum activities so that they can achieve good scores in their examination
. Fix the agreement mistake
examinations
Secondly
,By doing this
important Correct determiner usage
these
subjects
they must have to take part in other curriculum activities in the school
to learn how to cook various dishes , youngsters forget these things if they are not indulge
in any kind of Change the verb form
are not indulging
this
Correct determiner usage
these
acitivities
in Correct your spelling
activities
school
. For instance
, childerns
give more time on their important Correct your spelling
children
subjects
till they finished their senior secondary , afterthat
the Correct your spelling
after that
students
do not know how to manage house cleaning and how to do gardening in their home to decorate their house for good looking . Childerns
are getting away from these Correct your spelling
Children
these
things because they have more burden on their minds for learning Remove the redundancy
apply
subjects
which are compulsory to take higher
percentage to become something big in the future . Add an article
a higher
However
, the future of the students
totally become upon these course
they take the higher studies based on these courses so Change the determiner
this course
these courses
this
is main
problem for not taking interest in doing other Change the article
the main
skills
in school
.
To sum up , It is concluded that real
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real-life
life
skills
should be added in
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to
students
Change noun form
students'
student's
Life
because they can also
enhance their knowledge and feel relaxed while doing as
an additional subject and they can Change preposition
apply
also
learn how to manage all these things in a very accurate manner . Activities are very important in
these days as compared to previous times . Change preposition
apply
Students
becomes
more creative while learning these kinds of Change the verb form
become
skills
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Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
Linking words are very important in your essay.
To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.
Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.
In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.
Linking word examples:
- firstly
- secondly
- thirdly
- in additional
- moreover
- also
- for example
- for instance
- therefore
- however
- although
- even though
- despite