Some people think that real life skills like cooking, housekeeping and gardening should be included in the curriculum as compulsory subjects? Do you agree or disagree? Explain your opinion, using specific reasons and details.

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Many individuals feel that basic
life
abilities like cooking, housecleaning and gardening should be added
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the curriculum as mandatory courses . I
am fully agree
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with the given statement . According to my
perspective
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it should be
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in the
school
for learning
this
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skills
to enhance
knowlege
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knowledge
. To commence with ,
subjects
plays
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a crucial role in
students
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school
life
. There are many academic
subjects
which
childerns
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children
have to learn to overcome with them .
Firstly
, pupils focus on the main courses rather than curriculum activities so that they can achieve good scores in their
examination
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.
Secondly
,By doing
this
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important
subjects
they must have to take part in other curriculum activities in the
school
to learn how to cook various dishes , youngsters forget these things if they
are not indulge
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in any kind of
this
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acitivities
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activities
in
school
.
For instance
,
childerns
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children
give more time on their important
subjects
till they finished their senior secondary ,
afterthat
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after that
the
students
do not know how to manage house cleaning and how to do gardening in their home to decorate their house for good looking .
Childerns
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Children
are getting away from these
these
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things because they have more burden on their minds for learning
subjects
which are compulsory to take
higher
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percentage to become something big in the future .
However
, the future of the
students
totally become upon
these course
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they take the higher studies based on these courses so
this
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problem for not taking interest in doing other
skills
in
school
. To sum up , It is concluded that
real
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life
skills
should be added
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students
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Life
because they can
also
enhance their knowledge and feel relaxed while doing
as
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an additional subject and they can
also
learn how to manage all these things in a very accurate manner . Activities are very important
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these days as compared to previous times .
Students
becomes
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more creative while learning these kinds of
skills
.
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