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Some people think that using animals for experimentation purpose is cruel, but other people think that is necessary for the development of science. Discuss both views and give your opinion

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Nowadays, medical science is improving day by day. A number of people believe that usage of
animals
 for
madical
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medical
experiments
 is
in
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inhuman
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human
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humans
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.
On the other
hand
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 a small number of people think that for the improvement of science
experiments
 should be done on
animals
.
To begin
 with,
i
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 personally believe that
such
experiments
 should not be done on
animals
 because they
also
 have
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the rights
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rights
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right
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 to live and enjoy their life with family, and doing
this
 may cost the
animals
 their
lives
.
Additionally
 , it is almost impossible to survive for incapable
animals
 in
wild
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 which leads to unnecessary loss of
animals
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animals'
animal's
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lives
.
For example
, new hair styling products are
first
 tested on
animals
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animals'
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 eyes which leaves some of them blind .
such
 blind
animals
 cannot survive in their natural habitats, and they are left to die.
On the other hand
, a number of people believe that doing
trais
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trails
traps
 on
animals
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is
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in
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is
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 necessary for the growth of science. At
first
 , it is considered that human
lives
 are much more precious than
to
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animals
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animal
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lives
.
In
addition
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 human beings should not be used for
such
experiments
 because of human rights laws.
Therefore
,
animals
 are used in
experiments
 for developing medicines .
for instance
 , at the time of
development
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the development
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 of covid-19 vaccine the trials were done on
animals
 ,
as a result
 of successful
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trials
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trails
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trials
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 , vaccines got
apporoval
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approval
approved
 for humans. In
conclude
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, humans should not be used for
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the experiment
an experiment
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experiment
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experiments
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 so
animals
 are used for
such
 trials .
however
 , they
also
 have
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the rights
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rights
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right
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 to live and enjoy their life with their families .
hence
 , I believe that
such
experiments
 must be avoided as far as possible.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Animal experimentation
  • Cruelty
  • Ethical dilemmas
  • Medical breakthroughs
  • In vivo testing
  • In vitro testing
  • Bioethics
  • Alternative methods
  • Regulatory oversight
  • Vivisection
  • Animal welfare
  • Pharmacological research
  • Toxicology
  • Clinical trials
  • Moral imperatives
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