As well as making money, businesses also have social responsibilities. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Businesses have a huge role they pray in the
community
such
that apart from making
profit
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,they
also
have
public
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responsibility.In my opinion,
i
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full
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agree with the statement that business has to attend to social needs in the
community
and paying of taxes which support the
government
in building the
society
.
Firstly
,
projects
are part-and-parcel of
community
activity as they help in discovering talents through
involvement
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the involvement
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of games and show solidarity with the member of the
society
,
Moreover
this
a
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way of building confidentiality with the
society
and strengthening
security
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of the business where they
also
utilize that opportunity to advertise for their products which increase their sales .
For example
,Kenyatta University host
largest
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Africa
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games in the year 2022.
Therefore
,businesses are
such
an
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imperative
projects
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project
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in the
community
because
society
look
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looks
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up
into
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them for growth apart from making money.
Secondly
,businesses pay taxes
hence
making
profit
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is indispensable as the
government
has a policy for entrepreneurs that they have a cut
that is
submitted to the
government
.
Moreover
,
this
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collected taxes facilitate
in
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bulding
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building
the
society
.
For example
,infrastructure and water
projects
has
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currently been implemented in the villages through
member
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a member
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of parliament.
Therefore
,institutions must make
profit
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because they have a role to meet the need of the
society
and for the purposes of the growth of the
projects
itself
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and survival. To sum up,
corporation
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the corporation
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has a duty
towards
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the
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society
not only
making
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to make
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money but
also
helping
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to help
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members of
the
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society
discover talents through social activities.Notwithstanding, they support the
government
through collected tax from entrepreneurs
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Social responsibilities
  • Corporate social responsibility
  • Ethical behavior
  • Societal impact
  • Stakeholders
  • Profit-driven
  • Public perception
  • Environmental sustainability
  • Community development
  • Human rights
  • Workplace safety
  • Altruism
  • Balanced approach
  • Accountability
  • Consumer loyalty
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