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Describe a project that you did in school with your classmates or friends. You should say:ķ – what the project was – what it was about – how you completed it and whether you enjoyed the project or not.

#project #school #classmates #friends
The bar graph illustrates the
percentage
 of
women
 going to universities or colleges in
UK
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the UK
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, USA, Australia, South Korea and France in the years 1980 and 2015. Overall, the
percentage
 of school graduates intending to educate in
higher-levels
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higher levels
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 except
Australia
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in Australia
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 increased in 2015 compared with 1980. In 3
countries
 we have significant growth,
other
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the other
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 one had no change and the
last
 one had few changes. In general, we had more female students in universities in 2015 than
1980
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in 1980
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. More than 50% of
women
 from all
countries
 except South Korea
that
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which
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 was just 30% went to higher education;
however
, South Korea had the most increase in
number
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a number
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 of
women
 and
doubled
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doubling
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 from 15% to 30%.
The
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A
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 considerable part of
this
 chart is South Korea’s
women
educating
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education
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percentage
 in 2015
that
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which
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 is still less than
other
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the other
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 4
countries
 in 1980.
Although
 Australia did not have any change in numbers, it had the highest
percentage
compare
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compared
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to others in 1980 and in 2015 was equal to
USA
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the USA
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 and both of them had the
percentage
 of 57%. UK and France were near those 2
countries
 and
were
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we're
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 just 3% less than.
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
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    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
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    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
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