Some people think that the internet has brought people closer together while others think that people and communities have become more isolated. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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of using
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that it has revolutionized communication.Certain demography
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that being virtually connected has
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people
closer together while other
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the
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opinion that
people
and communities
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has
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become more
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due to
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of
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.
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essay will discuss both
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of the argument and provide evidence as to why the invention of digital connectivity is superior.
Firstly
,
the
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society has remained
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because of reliance on the
internet
.
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,
today
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generation
were
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born in a contemporary era of technology and
early
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introduction of the
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smartphone
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smart phone
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.
For example
,during the global pandemic of covid 19,learning institutions adapted online
platform
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for learning
such
that it increased
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on the gadget significantly.
Secondly
,
people
are purchasing items online
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the
confort
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comfort
of their home
such
that they do not feel the need to step out to purchase their regular item which
make
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them more isolated.
Therefore
,the benefit of
internet
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outweigh
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the drawbacks.
Moreover
,
internet
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has
revolutionilized
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revolutionized
revolutionalized
the way we communicate since we can stay connected with family,friends and colleagues wherever they are.
Consequently
,
people
can keep
intouch
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in touch
through several media
such
as emails,zoom and video calls.
Furthermore
,
people
are able to save money and fuel by doing
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and studying online.
For example
,families meeting are being held online through video, which is becoming common
for
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meetings.
Therefore
,
this
advancment
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advancement
has made
people
feel more connected than before. To sum up,
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reliance on communication
network
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can cause serious isolation which is not healthy whereas there many merits of the same.In my opinion, there should be a balance
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use
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of
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platform
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and it should not prevent
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society from meeting friends and
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physically.
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