The crime rate among teenagers has increased dramatically in many countries. Discuss some possible reasons for this increase and suggest solitions.

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It is true that the rate of

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teenagers

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cirmes

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crimes

has increased through the recent

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, and it happens

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widely

in many countries all over the world and it

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phenomena

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to notice these days.

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the possible reasons

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why

teenagers

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commit

crimes

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, we should

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consider the dramatic change in our world. Social media makes everyone isolated in his own world and makes parents far away from their children. they cannot find out what the children think or if they

invlove

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involve

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in extremist organizations support committing

crimes

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hate

crimes

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modern games

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motivates

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teeangers

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teenagers

to take the matter of holding guns and shooting someone easy.

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the movies which contain

violence

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scenes, when the

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adolescents

watch

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movies

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without

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from their parents, they begin to imagine themselves doing

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actions. To find solutions for

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, we have to think in many aspects to deter these factors which be found the possible reasons of making

teeangers

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teenagers

committing

crimes

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. The family role is the most significant aspect here , by

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raising

raining

children with great values, keeping eyes on

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their

and their interests, encouraging them to participate

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sports clubs or

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debate

activities

instead

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of spending most of their time on social media. The government has its role by issuing laws to deter

ownering

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guns and to limit and strict

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guns

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legal business.

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celebrities have a big role to be great positive models for

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teenagers

and support them to be good

memebers

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members

in society. The ex-criminals who committed

crimes

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in the past and spend their

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make t.v shows to

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teenagers

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their stories In conclusion, the rate

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of teenagers

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teenagers

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crimes

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reachs

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a high levels

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and we should analyse the reasons and talking

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to face it

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Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

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Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

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Grammatical Range: 4.0

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Task Achievement: 6.0

Complete response

7.5

Clear & comprehensive ideas

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Appropriate word count

4 paragraphs

306 words

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Topic Vocabulary:

dramatically
glorification
desensitize
mimic
economic factors
survival
necessities
inadequate
viable alternative
parental engagement
strict regulations
low-income
quality of education
access
workshops
counseling
supervision
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The crime rate among teenagers has increased dramatically in many countries. Discuss some possible reasons for this increase and suggest solitions.

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Maintaining public libraries is a waste of money since computer technology can replace their functions . Do you agree or disagree?

Some think that printed books are not necessary in the digital era, because all writing can be stored electronically. Others think printed books still play an important role. Discuss both veiw and give your opinion.

some parents are worried about the increasing level of violence in TV, videos games and other types of entertainments for children's leisure. how does this affect children. How do you think the problem can be tackled?

Many university students want to learn about different subjects in addition to their main subjects. Others feel it is important to give all their time and attention to studying for their qualification. Discuss both views and give your opinion.