band One of the consequences of improved medical care is that people are living longer and life expectancy is increasing. Do you think advantages outweigh disadvantages?
In the modern world , implementing improvements in the medical industry has increased long
life
expectancy. Respect the past, a large part of the population can
enjoy medical care, Wrong verb form
could
while
in the past was accessible to only a few people
. However
,Correct article usage
a
life
is only desirable if you can look after yourself. In the essay below I will discuss all the vantages
and advantages and if the advantages Correct your spelling
advantages
outwegh
the disadvantages. Living longer is not a synonym for health. Correct your spelling
outweigh
Firstly
, In the Hospitals, there are many old people
suffering from mental pathologies , while
there are other patients with more serious illnesses ,that cannot be medical provided because of short beds. Secondly
, Not all can take care of their parents for various reasons, lack of money , not enough time etc. Moreover
causing problems in their personal life
. In society not, all can afford the costs that medical care has which is traduct in discrepancy. There are a lot of positive aspects, grandparents , if they are in healthy condition, can teach the values to the children and help their parents during the
job time and Change the word
their
also
older people
have more experience than us and we can learn a lot from them. In the
conclusion, I think that some Correct article usage
apply
people
deserve a longer life
, after spending a life
doing a hard job and building something. I'm convinced that there are more positive aspects than negatives.Submitted by davidestec11 on
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Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
Linking words are very important in your essay.
To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.
Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.
In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.
Linking word examples:
- firstly
- secondly
- thirdly
- in additional
- moreover
- also
- for example
- for instance
- therefore
- however
- although
- even though
- despite