Some people believe that to improve public health more public sports facility should be provided by government. Others believe that this will have little effect and other measures are needed to improve people's health. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

A handful of
people
think that constructing more fitness centres should be a way for the administration to improve the
health
of her subjects.
On the other hand
, another set of
individual
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opine that doing that would not solve the issue in full as there are other measures to be taken
such
as building more public hospitals.
However
, I am of the opinion that to better the
health
of the
people
,
government
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should
also
subsidize immunization in all the localities.
People
are convinced that to enhance the well-being of the individuals,
government
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should build more
sport
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centers
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. What
this
means is that the majority of
individual
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will benefit from extra fitness grounds.
For instance
, there are
people
who are obese but could not go for a workout in a gym simply because they cannot afford the fees whereas if it is in public places where little or no money is being collected they will work out thereby improving their
health
.
Conversely
, other persons believe that there are other actions that could be taken by the authorities to better the
health
of the public including building additional public hospitals
this
implies that constructing extra
hospital
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will help everyone to get medical help
as at
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when due because it will make the hospital accessible and cost of hospital bills lesser.
For instance
, there are individuals who cannot afford the bills of
private
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sectors
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but if it is in
general
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hospital they can pay the little or even nothing
that is
required. In my
opinion
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the
government
can do more by subsidizing the cost of every
vaccines
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vaccine
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. By
this
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I mean that the powers-that-be should reduce or even make free all the required vaccines for all ages against the existing and predicted diseases as
this
will go a long way in enriching
people
's
health
because when they
are immunized
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the risk of being infected reduces and it will save the
health
sector resources and manpower. In conclusion, few
people
believe that erecting extra
sport
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centres is a good way for
government
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the government
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to enhance
people
's
health
. Inversely, other individuals think that would not be enough and the authorities should
also
build extra public
health
centres for the
people
. In my
view
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I believe the bureaucracy can do more by reducing or removing the cost of every
vaccines
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for immunisation thereby making it affordable for all by that means
improving
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their
health
.

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