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You have a full-time job and you are also doing a part-time evening course. You now find that you cannot continue the course. Write a letter to your teachers. In your letter describe the situation explain why you cannot continue at this time say what action you would like to take You do NOT need to write any addresses.

#job #course #teachers #situation #time #action #addresses
Dear
Mr.
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 William, I am John
Andreay
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Andrey
, a student
of
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in
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Executive
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the Executive
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 management
course
. I am writing to inform you that I am planning to leave
management
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course
 shortly due to personal issues. I joined the
course
last
 year to enhance my managerial skills. In fact, the program is so interesting and helpful to improve soft skills required as an officer
though
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 several constraints led me to think of discontinuation of
course
. I was doing
part time
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part-time
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 job after study hours due to financial
problem
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problems
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. Recently, I got
other opportunity
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another opportunity
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 to work
for
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full time
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 along with
ongoing
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committment
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commitment
. I would not able to justify the study and jobs together and
hence
 decided to drop the
course
. I would
definately
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definitely
 continue the
course
 in future once I have some financial freedom. As of now I will fully focus on
job
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my job
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 and try to help
family
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my family
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 as much as I can. I would like you to favour me in my decision and notify the College
for
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 the same. I am looking forward
for
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 your as usual support.
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Yours
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Your
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 sincerely, Rama Mori
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Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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