Extreme sports such as sky diving and skiing are very dangerous and should be banned. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this view?

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It is obvious that extreme
sports
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are increasingly popular among
people
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in recent years. Some argue that the government should restrict
people
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from
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them because of the possibility of accidents. I completely disagree with
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notion that they are too dangerous and should be banned. In my opinion, so-called extreme
sports
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are not as risky as
people
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consider. All
sports
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, in fact, involve some
elements
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of risk and there should always be clear regulations and safety procedures.
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,
people
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who take part in extreme
sports
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are required to undergo
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proper training in advance. Take ‘Sky Diving’ as an example, a participant has to join a registered club at
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and
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after passing through provided mental and physical tests, he can do
further
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flying and sky diving.
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, beginners are not allowed to
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solo in
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sports
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. In fact, they are accompanied by an experienced professional during the course. It,
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, can be said that the rate of serious injuries can be minimized
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this
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way.
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to my argument, in today’s world of democratic societies,
people
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have their own
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to do whatever they like. It would be unfair for a person to be limited
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enjoying himself.
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, even a strong argument against
this
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ban would be difficult of enforcing
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, which means most risky
sports
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like sea-wave surfing and alpine skiing are
practiced
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far away from
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of any authorities. For
this
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reason,
form
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my point of view, it would be a better idea for
government
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to help
sports
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enthusiasts by providing renovated safety measures and other technological supports
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as GPS and satellites
instead
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of curbing them.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • adrenaline rush
  • risk threshold
  • thrill-seeking
  • safety protocols
  • hazard assessment
  • adventure tourism
  • regulatory framework
  • personal autonomy
  • informed consent
  • risk mitigation strategies
  • thrill-seeking behavior
  • protective gear
  • extreme athleticism
  • freedom of choice
  • accident prevalence
  • emergency response
  • courage and resilience
  • endorphin release
  • legal implications
  • peer pressure effects
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