Some believe that people today have no interest in maintaining the traditional culture of their country or region. Others believe that it is still important to people that we preserve a traditional way of life. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

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Recently, the debate on whether citizens should preserve their own
cultures
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has been heated. While some
people
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claim that traditional
cultures
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are not
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important
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globalization,
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others
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argue that
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soft power can be enhanced by protecting the traditional living style. As far as I am concerned, it is crucial for
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to maintain the traditional
culture
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.
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with, teenagers lose interest in traditional
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by
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globalization
. As citizens are exposed to various types of
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owing to the widespread
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information, they may be attracted to exotic traditions and have less interest in their own
cultures
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.
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, more
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are celebrating Crisment rather than Chongyang
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festive
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, knowledge of
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may not
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to young adults easily once they are attracted
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other's
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culture
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cultures
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.
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, preserving
traditional
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the traditional
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living
style
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can enhance
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power of countries. As traditional
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usually show the historical background of one region, young
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can learn to treasure their lives and society.
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, by teaching the hardship of social revolution, teenagers might be
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to
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their society.
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, social cohesion can be enhanced and a more stable environment can be achieved. In
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conclusion
,
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globalization allows citizens
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exposed to traditions from other countries reduce, it is necessary for
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to maintain
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culture
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as it can stable the development of a country by
protecing
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protecting
providing
the social cohesion.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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