Some people believe that allowing children to make their own choices on every day matters (such as food clothes and entertainment )is likely to result in a society of individuals only think about her own wishes .other people believe that it is important for children to make the decision about matters that affect them. discuss both views and give your own.

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whether giving our
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or not letting them
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be independent at an early age
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has emerged as an area of focus these years. Some people think of if infants are accustomed to
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their own decisions wherever they want it could bring some problems for society's equilibrium, while others think it is compulsory to let them pick
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. so I want to elucidate
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above viewpoints and give my own point of view. ( I
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think of a better word for friendship.) Probably there is nothing so much problematic as a child who is stubborn and
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whatever they want.So it is imparetiveimperative to see what would happen if you let your
children
make up their own decision.
To begin
with, as a parent if you give your
children
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they do daily, it is they are more likely to be
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and not be able to cover handling all of those tasks.
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their brain function is not as mature as ours, not
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enough
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logic for
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decision-making .To exemplify ,considering a child who craves for ice-cream if he had been given the
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make his own decision ,he would eat
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ice cream day-in and
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which basically results in obesity.
Secondly
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giving them the freedom for making the choice they desire for
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brings
them up as being headstrong. Since
then
, they possibly do not pay attention to the rules they have been imposed .
Furthermore
,as
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collaborative work and sharing ideas with their peers since they have felt being self-government.// autonomous
On the other hand
,
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those
children
who are brought up with
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of two methods
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would benefit
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. To embark on, for
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who
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involveds
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important decision he makes there
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more chance of being confident .
For example
, if he deviates from the
right
path as a child he has been said how to deal with ,
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. As he grow up ,he would reach
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a better understanding of what he has learnt in his childhood .
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,they will become not competent but versatile as they can apply two
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different
different aspects when they are faced with life's problems.
Consequently
, the chance of being a leader and boss is a lot more in
children
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had been told what should or should not
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do. In conclusion, I personally believe that the
children
who grow up with the
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in every walk of life
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would become more mindful
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their life
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