Information technology enables many people to do their work outside their workplace (e.g. at home, when traveling, etc.).

These days information technology has made drastic improvements in the work environment.
As a result
, many people are working from
home
. I believe there are numerous benefits compared to the
workplace
. Even Though, there are a few negative factors
also
.
However
, advantages easily override the disadvantages. I will be talking about my perception in the forthcoming paragraphs.
To begin
with, working from
home
has many benefits. Importantly, we can reduce the
time
difference in the
workplace
.
In Particular
, we can avoid transportation
time
to the office.
For example
, these days city traffic is too congested.
As a result
, it will create lots of stress and anxieties.
Hence
, people can save the
time
which individuals are working from
home
. People can utilize
the
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time
in a proper manner. Nowadays,
time
is a more valuable element. Because
,
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entities are operating
business
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businesses
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with less manpower.
Furthermore
,
development
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of information technology leads to increased business output.
On the other hand
, these days
workplace
environments have numerous negative factors. Generally,
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are always creating politics. Due
to
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,
output
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will reduce
besides
workplace
always should be comfortable and friendly.
In addition
,
workplace
some employees
they
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will waste
the
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time
for
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involving irrelevant affairs.
Secondly
, when the person works from
home
there is an opportunity to spend the
time
on personal
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.
Nevertheless
,
work from
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home
outputs
is not exceed
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the
workplace
convenience To Conclude, as far
i
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am concerned working from
home
is the finest option
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up to
workplace
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. We can save
time
.
This
is a major opportunity. In the
,
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workplace
there is a chance to develop unpleasant situations.
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