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Information technology enables many people to do their work outside their workplace (e.g. at home, when traveling, etc.).

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These days information technology has made drastic improvements in the work environment.
As a result
, many people are working from
home
. I believe there are numerous benefits compared to the
workplace
. Even Though, there are a few negative factors
also
.
However
, advantages easily override the disadvantages. I will be talking about my perception in the forthcoming paragraphs.
To begin
 with, working from
home
 has many benefits. Importantly, we can reduce the
time
 difference in the
workplace
.
In Particular
, we can avoid transportation
time
 to the office.
For example
, these days city traffic is too congested.
As a result
, it will create lots of stress and anxieties.
Hence
, people can save the
time
 which individuals are working from
home
. People can utilize
the
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time
 in a proper manner. Nowadays,
time
 is a more valuable element. Because
,
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 entities are operating
business
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businesses
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 with less manpower.
Furthermore
,
development
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 of information technology leads to increased business output.
On the other hand
, these days
workplace
 environments have numerous negative factors. Generally,
Workplace
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workplaces
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 are always creating politics. Due
to
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,
output
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 will reduce
besides
workplace
 always should be comfortable and friendly.
In addition
,
workplace
 some employees
they
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will waste
the
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time
for
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involving irrelevant affairs.
Secondly
, when the person works from
home
 there is an opportunity to spend the
time
 on personal
occurrence
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occurrences
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.
Nevertheless
,
work from
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work-from-home
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home
 outputs
is not exceed
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 the
workplace
 convenience To Conclude, as far
i
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 am concerned working from
home
 is the finest option
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 up to
workplace
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the workplace
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. We can save
time
.
This
 is a major opportunity. In the
,
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workplace
 there is a chance to develop unpleasant situations.
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