Over time, as children grow older, the relationship they have with their parents changes. In your opinion, what role should parents have in their adult children’s lives?

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It is clear that relationships become affected between parents and their

children

when they grow up.

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essay will explore two of the problems which have resulted from these changes and propose measures which might address them. Nowadays,

children

become fastly depending and have their own ideas and decisions. Between studying, working and the technologies,

children

spend less time with their parents. As a

results

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, the family doesn't spend time together and it's

becam

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become

became

hard to understand each other. The relationship is complicated if we do not keep in touch, Whether lives occupations family have to consecrate a minimum day a week reserved for

children

and to talk about their projects and their future.

On the other hand

naturally

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human beings are so

protectiveand

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protective and

protective

want to keep looking after their

children

even they are grown up. They do not accept easily the idea of their

children

are

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adulte

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adult

and

independing

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independent

person

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people

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Consequently

children

are not allowed to

take there

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make their

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own

discisions

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decisions

about

there

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their

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study

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studies

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or creare and that damage the relationships between parents and

there

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their

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children

. There

are

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apply

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diffirents

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different

way

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ways

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to respect, and they have to respect

there

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their

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discision

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decision

and support the

children

. In short, we have to spend much time with family even with our occupations

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and to be more

comprehensif

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comprehensive

and

supportif

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supportive

support if

by respecting our

children

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children's

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discions

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discussions

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meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 4.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 4.0

Complete response

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

5 paragraphs

221 words

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