The charts below show the percentage in typical meals of three types if nutrient, all of which maybe unhealthy if eaten too much.

The charts below show the percentage in typical meals of three types if nutrient, all of which maybe unhealthy if eaten too much.
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The pie charts compare the rate of
sodium
, saturated fat and added sugar in typical food consumed in the USA which may be harmful if eaten in much quantity.
Overall
, the highest proportion of
sodium
and saturated fats were consumed during dinner
while
the least was at breakfast.
On the other hand
, added sugar was mostly used in
snacks
and was not commonly included in brunch.
Firstly
,
sodium
and saturated fats followed a similar pattern of consumption,
sodium
amounted to an equal percentage for
snacks
and breakfast meals which is 14%,
while
during dinner and lunch, the
sodium
nutrient level was 43% and 29% respectively. For saturated fat, there was an increase of 2% in brunch dishes compared to
sodium
and 21%
for
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snacks
. Meanwhile, for supper and lunch, saturated fat was
also
eaten in high
proportion
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like
sodium
accounting for 37% and 26% each by American residents.
Also
, the addition of sugar in dietary food was more in
snacks
amounting to 42% and almost one-fourth for dinner.
Then
, during breakfast and lunch reduced
quantity
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of sweeteners 16% and 19% respectively were added to the food consumed in the United States of America.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "also, while".
Vocabulary: Replace the words sodium, snacks with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "compare" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 2 times.
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