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It is generally believed that some people are born with certain talents, for instance for spots or music, and others are not. However, it is sometimes claimed that any child can be taught to become a good sports person or musician. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

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In the world today, there has been a widespread controversy that some skills are inborn
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 as games and
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 while others think
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 ability can be put into practice well when the teaching is passed to an individual.
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 and my personal opinion will be drawn. On the one hand, supporters of
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 view claim that enthusiasm shown towards
music
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 at a tender age could depict an innate attribute in a child.
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, at the sound of
music
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, some infant stops crying and tried to make a dance movement at the same time.
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 few youngsters
skills
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 in kicking an object despite
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knowledge
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.
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 may be due to their inborn talent for sports.
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,
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 of
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 that,
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are
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 Practicable and not necessarily inborn. The reason is that when children are being taught a skill
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 as
music
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 or game, there is
tendency
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 the will act on it.
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, learned
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 can be likened to being gifed.
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 is due to the expertise shown
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 the acquired attribute being taught.
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, an African man with no former
knowledge
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 was taught football
skill
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 by his uncle, he
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 later become a professional at it and famous as well. In my opinion, talent can be
an inborn personalities
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an inborn personality
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 for some people while others can learn the same skill, develop it and become an expert at it. In conclusion,
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 essay discussed the two perspectives of people that, some
gift
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 can be learned due to the fact that learning can be
practiced
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 and
knowledged
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knowledge
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 passed can become an act of expertise.
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, some ability and expertise can be born
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 an individual due to
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a few
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 traits shown during
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the infancy
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