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In the future all cars, buses and trucks will be driverless. The only people travelling inside these vehicles will be passengers. Do you think the advantages of driverless vehicles outweigh the disadvantages?

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As technology develops,
vehicles
 will increasingly become automated.
Although
 there are both merits and demerits of
this
 trend, I believe that
driverless
vehicles
 are good for people and society. There are two main reasons why some argue that automatic
vehicles
 have drawbacks. One major concern is that autonomous driving can cause moral problems.
For example
, when a
driverless
car
 hits a pedestrian or trees on the street, it is difficult to determine
whom
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 should take responsibility between a
car
 manufacturer or a person in a
car
.
In addition
, automated
vehicles
 could cause job losses in
specific
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sector
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.
In these
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 days, it is obvious that plenty of people are driving for
living
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a living
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 by trucking, delivering
foods
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, or taxi driving. As
driverless
vehicles
 will take over their jobs, those who rely on driving for
living
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 would lose their jobs and need to find new ones.
Nevertheless
, self-driving cars will bring significant positive changes
on
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 society.
First
 of all, the number of
car
crushes
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 will be reduced by self-driving
vehicles
. It is proved by myriads of studies that most
car
 accidents are caused by human errors
such
 as drunk and distracted driving. Since machines are not exposed to these risks, they can significantly reduce accidents caused by human carelessness. Another positive effect
towards
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driverless
vehicles
 is that it provides accessible transportation for
elderly
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 and disabled. The result of
this
 is that those who are facing difficulties taking current transportation
is
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are
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 going to gain independence to travel or commute. To conclude,
although
 using
driverless
vehicles
 could cause moral problems or job losses, it is evident that it gives everyone the opportunity to travel safely. In
this
 regard, I hope autonomous cars will be released and popularized in the future.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • driverless vehicles
  • advantages
  • disadvantages
  • increased safety
  • reduced traffic congestion
  • improved efficiency
  • accessibility
  • disabled
  • elderly
  • job displacement
  • privacy concerns
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