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Nowadays we are producing more and more rubbish. Why do you think this is happening? What can governments do to help reduce the amount of rubbish produced?

#rubbish #governments #amount
The gradual
increase
 in producing
rubbish
 and releasing it to either the atmosphere or to dumping stations has become a consistent talking point in recent years. Releasing
rubbish
 in the shape of production
waste
 or simply household
waste
 has risen in leaps and bounds. There are several underlying reasons for
this
 gradual
increase
. The most prominent being the ever-increasing world population. The global population has risen to 8 billion since the turn of the century resulting in an
increase
 in per capita consumption.
This
 will eventually result in
increase
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 in producing
rubbish
.
Thus
, it is inevitable that the
waste
 produced by each household will rise considerably in the years to come. The
second
 factor is to cater for the ever-increasing per capita demand, the manufacturers need to adhere to increased production.
Thus
,
this
 would ultimately result in
increase
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 in manufacturing and industrial
rubbish
.
In addition
, these two factors mentioned above will lead to increased demand for dumping stations and increased air pollution due to the burning of
rubbish
. The Governments have a major role to play in terms of formulating and implementing policies for effective and efficient
rubbish
management
. It is the Government that can act as a gatekeeper or if not, the society at large will face unnecessary connotations due to inefficient
waste
management
. The most effective action would be to introduce an environmental tax
thus
 all the stakeholders who are involved in producing debris can be held accountable and eventually
this
 will lead to maintaining proper and effective
waste
management
 systems. The tax money can be invested
into
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 the research and development of sustainable debris
management
 techniques. The other course of action would be to encourage recycling. Governments can build proper recycling facilities and introduce incentives for companies and households who use recycled materials for their day-to-day activities.
This
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 could be tax breaks for both manufacturing and households. The problem of increasing
rubbish
 production needs to address quickly and it’s the Government that needs to play a bigger role.
Otherwise
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this
 could lead to many socio-economic consequences in the future.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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