Some people think that the environment may be destroyed because of tourism. Others, however, believe that it is a way to preserve nature. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.
Recently, the debate on whether
tourism
is beneficial for the environment
has been heated. While some people claim that tourism
is the major reason for environmental degradation, others argue that tourism
encourages people to pay more attention to the environment
. As far as I am concerned, the disadvantages bring
by travelling may overweight its advantages.
Wrong verb form
brought
To begin
with, waste produced by tourism
may be detrimental to the environment
. Since people from developing countries may not have the awareness of protecting the environment
, they may leave rubbish everywhere. For example
, a beach can be filled with plastic bags once it becomes a visiting place. Therefore
, human activities created by tourism
may destroy the ecosystem and make it difficult for the environment
to recover.
However
, tourism
may force countries to give priority to the environment
. As a pleasant environment
is more attractive to visitors, the local government may take action to regulate citizens' behaviours to sharpen their competitive edges. For example
, hunting may be prevented in certain areas for bio-diversity. Therefore
, citizens may raise their awareness about the environment
once the state imposed
Add a hyphen
state-imposed
regulation
on them.
In conclusion, Fix the agreement mistake
regulations
although
new environmental policies may be introduced to the public, it
could be challenging when it comes to supervision. Correct pronoun usage
they
Beside
, Replace the word
Besides
tourism
may also
result in significant plastic usage, which can pose undisirable
environmental Correct your spelling
undesirable
issue
in the long run.Fix the agreement mistake
issues
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Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
Linking words are very important in your essay.
To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.
Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.
In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.
Linking word examples:
- firstly
- secondly
- thirdly
- in additional
- moreover
- also
- for example
- for instance
- therefore
- however
- although
- even though
- despite