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Some people believe that it is best to accept a bad situation such as an unsatisfactory job or shortage of money .others argue that it is better to try and improve such a situation. discussed both this view and give your opinion?

#people #situation #job #shortage #money
There are those who widely hold the outline ,to mean «the acceptance of any hardship» if you are faced
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with
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. Short of cash or unrealistic working hours,
for instance
.
Nevertheless
, some people believe that it is much better
trying
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 to confront the problem and
giving
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 it the best shot .
On the other hand
, I totally believe that it is
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 viable idea
combining
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 both viewpoints to mean not
accept
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 the condition but making effort for that trying to deal
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. Turning to the former idea about the issue, tendencies
like not being satisfied or not having
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, like not being satisfied or not having great feeling about your wages,
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great
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 feeling about your wages is being noticeable increased.
As a result
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there are definitely some folks
want
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 to stop and not
keeping
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 up with their society or work.
Firstly
 ,one reason is relevant
to
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the more responsibility you have the more you think of failure. It means that
,
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thinking of you have to reach a decent salary to which making your family live wealthily and spontaneously, thinking of you will not be able
provide
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 your family with amenity unless performing your duties at your workplace and covering the meet of company, will collapse you. According to
basis
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 of
above
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viewpoints
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 these
sort
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 of tensions
bring
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 you
about
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to not think of
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 possibility
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 you can handle these conditions and
therefore
 you find it better to stop rather than
keeping
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 up. The advocacy groups tend to be against accepting the problem or any sort of occupation you have with your mind. They say,
instead
 ,try to keep up even though ,you think of standing at the end.
To begin
 with, let's pick up the situation which is dominated at your workplace
varried
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varied
 from
job
 dissatisfaction to low-level of payment. Precisely ,if you require not continuing since you cannot tolerate
this difficulties
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,
then
 there are so many
job
 vacancies and
therefore
 other
job
seeker
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 looking for employment opportunity would be replaced with you. so it can be clearly seen that you are easily taken the place of yours
to
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those volunteers.
That is
 why you should stand difficulties just a bit more due to being replaced with others not in your
job
 but entire of your life. All in all ,from my vantage point these complementary viewpoints should apply together in your life
instead
 of just attempting or leaving severity as it is.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Contentment
  • Resilience
  • Personal growth
  • Endurance
  • Initiative
  • Advancement
  • Catalyst
  • Financial stability
  • Status quo
  • Innovation
  • Missed opportunities
  • Life satisfaction
  • Adverse situations
  • Taking control
  • Risk assessment
  • Change management
  • Self-improvement
  • Motivation
  • Stagnation
  • Proactivity
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