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success is often measured in terms of how much money somebody has earend do you think wealth is a good measure of success? how else could we measure whether somebody is successful or not

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Success
 is a complicated philosophical concept
that is
 both culturally and individually determined. Nowadays, many people define their
success
 by the
amount
 of money they have earned.
This
 essay will discuss why wealth is a good indicator of a
person
’s
success
, and
also
 address another way that can be used to measure
success
, namely educational achievement. The
amount
 of the
person
’s wealth directly reflects the extent to which
this
person
 is successful in his or her
life
. It is undeniable that with money numerous dreams can be achieved starting from getting a single pair of shoes to buying a fancy luxurious Lamborghini. In my opinion, the ability to achieve dreams is equivalent to being successful in
life
. Bill Gates is a good example; he earns every day millions of dollars, and he is considered successful for his
amount
 of money. A different scale that can be
also
 applied to determine
success
 in
life
 is the level of education. The
amount
 of knowledge that the
person
 has obtained and the number of educational degrees that have been collected can bring a feeling of self-satisfaction and
subsequently
 a sense of
success
.
For instance
, the well-known scientists who dedicated their
life
 for the sake of science and knowledge are described as nothing but successful.
Therefore
. the more knowledge the
person
 gains the more successful will be in his or her
life
. In conclusion, in my opinion, wealth is truly representative of a
person
’s
success
 in
life
.
Additionally
, educational progress can
also
 be used to tell whether a
person
 is successful or not.
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