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Some people say that music is a good way of bringing people of different cultures and ages together. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion.

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People
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 have always been divided from each other, and
individuals
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 are in the search of a thing that can unite everyone. Numerous
people
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 speculate various societies and age groups can be unified nicely with the
music
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.
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 my perspective,
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 belief is valid, and in the following paragraphs, I will explore the rationale for my viewpoint on the matter.      All
individuals
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 can access various
music
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 genres, and all of them can indulge themselves in the same
song
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. In fact, when a person comes across a
music
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 piece in a movie or TV series, they may relish it whether they are peers or not and look it up on the
music
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 apps
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 as Spotify.
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, a few days ago, I started watching a popular TV series called Stranger Things, and I enjoyed the
song
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 called Running Up That Hill, which was
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 made in the 80s. My parents genuinely appreciate
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song
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 too, and
that is
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 actually
one
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 of the things we have in common. I believe
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 is
one
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 of the examples that
people
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 from various ages can unite
individuals
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 at
one
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.     
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,
music
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 can assist various cultures to unite into
one
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. Indeed, these days, Kpop, a
music
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 style that Korean singers make, and English songs are the utmost popular
song
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 of all time. Unsurprisingly, if we take a look at the popular
song
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 list on Spotify, there is no doubt that a Korean pop
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 group called Blackpink is in the top ten.
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 group has been loved and admired by its fans worldwide. These
people
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 have fan clubs, and they often communicate with each other.
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 can be proof that
music
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 brings
people
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 together.     In conclusion,  I maintain that
music
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 is an excellent way to join
individuals
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 together of all ages and cultures. In the future, I hope
music
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 retains its power to unify
people
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.
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Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Linking words are very important in your essay.

To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.

Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.

Linking word examples:

  • firstly
  • secondly
  • thirdly
  • in additional
  • moreover
  • also
  • for example
  • for instance
  • therefore
  • however
  • although
  • even though
  • despite

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • universal language
  • evoke
  • connect
  • diverse audiences
  • cultural exchange
  • generational gaps
  • shared experiences
  • unifying force
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