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People find it very difficult to speak in public or to give a presentation before an audience. Do you think public speaking skill is really important? Should students be taught public speaking at school?

#people #presentation #audience #skill #students #school
It is undeniable that public speaking is an important ability for social
life
.
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 found it challenging. I believe speech in front of
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 is obviously important and students have to learn about it at school. There is no doubt that nowadays
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 to speak for folk has
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 role in
people
's social level.
That is
 to say, in many aspects
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 as
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 work,
ceminares
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seminars
, or even family gathering, it
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occurre
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occurred
 someone needs to speak for a group of
people
. Because implementing it correctly not only can make more relationships
,
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 but
also
, may lead to more opportunities.
For example
, many employees like advertisements prefer to employ individuals with high levels of public speaking
skill
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.
Furthermore
,
this
 has affected
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self confidence
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in
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 podcasters. In short, having
this
skill
 prominent persons between throng that psychologically have impacted on
life
 satisfaction.
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this
 ability in
schools
 can have many benefits for students that make performing it necessary.
In other words
, many
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 needs individuals to speak correctly in different situations. So, if
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 it in
schools
,
it
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will make more
jobopportunities
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job opportunities
.
Moreover
, it is clear that adolescence is a critical period that
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 traits in teenagers and
make
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 some of them shy.
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 public speaking
skill
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 in
schools
 and
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 a chance to speak in front of
people
 in
appropriate
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an appropriate
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 education system often solve their shyness which
consequently
 will have been impacting on social and emotional relations.
Besides
 these, speech for a group of
people
 is one of the
life
 skills that
makes
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better
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 society. The result of teaching it will be individuals with better mental health in
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 job positions. In conclusion, it is clear that public speaking is an essential
skill
 for social
life
that
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 educating it in
schools
 often makes
better
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 future for students.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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