In some countries, it is now illegal to reject someone applying for a job because of his or her age. Do you think this is a positive or negative development?

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Unlawful denial of employment for people in some nations is unacceptable and should be totally condemned. I agree completely with the following relevant points in

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with ,

job

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the job

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is an occupation someone does to attain a living while

age

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is the number of years a person

have

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has

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accomplished in life. denial of employment for some certain

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age grades

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can

predisposed

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the individual to

alot

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a lot

lot

of harm in

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apply

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society.

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instance

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an adult that goes in search of a job should be given an opportunity to

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his or her talent to avoid frustration.

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this

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chance given to the individual, it will enable them to participate fully with their mind and

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achieve their goal.

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, when an individual

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has

attain

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a certain

age

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and prefers to take care of his or her needs, he or she should be encouraged rather than being denied

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apply

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the chance of showing the world what he

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or can

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achieve.

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example

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a talented musician that was denied a job opportunity can lead to the end of his career.

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this

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denial from the

country

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it will lead to emotional instability. In conclusion,

iam

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I am

of the opinion that countries should

endavour

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endeavour

to make available employment opportunities for individuals of different

age

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grades that are interested in doing the work and

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avoid discrimination

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in order

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inorder

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to prevent

alot

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a lot

of harm it will cause to the individual and society

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Word Count

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A very long essay will not give you a higher band score.

Aim for between 260 to 290 words in writing task 2. This will ensure a concise essay and will be realistic in terms of time management. You have only 40 minutes to write the essay and you need around 10 minutes of planning time, so you will not be able to write a long essay in 30 minutes.

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 8.0

Complete response

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

4 paragraphs

246 words

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Topic Vocabulary:

age discrimination
inclusive workplace
workplace diversity
workforce experience
equality in hiring
age-related stereotypes
demographic changes
economic growth
social security systems
consumer spending
non-discriminatory policies
bias
fair practices
retirement age
intergenerational collaboration

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In some countries, it is now illegal to reject someone applying for a job because of his or her age. Do you think this is a positive or negative development?

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Countries should spend money on trains rather than new roads. Do you agree or disagree?

In most successful organisations, some people believe that communication between managers and workers is important, other people say that other factors are more important. What is your opinion?

In some countries, more and more people are becoming interested in finding out about the history of the house or building they live in. What are the reasons for this? How can people research this? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant example for your own knowledge or experience.

Some people think that parents should teach their children how to be good members of society. Others, however, believe that school is the best place to learn this. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.