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It is pointless making children who lack artistic talent learn painting and drawing in Art classes at school. Instead, they should concentrate on other creative or practical subjects for which they may have more aptitude. To what extent to do you agree or disagree?

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It is argued that it does not make any sense to teach
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 at
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 to those
children
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 who are not good at it, because concentrating on other subjects is more useful for them.
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 essay completely disagrees with
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 statement. I believe painting and drawing can contribute to
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’s mental health and develop other skills in them
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 as creativity and imagination.
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 of all, painting is a perfect way to relax. I am sure
children
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 need it at
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 as they work hard and experience constant light or strong emotional stress.
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,
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 can make you calm and less nervous which is significantly important for young
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.
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, in 2021 Cambridge University did research on what impact
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 classes have on
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 at
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. 89 per cent of
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 felt far less tired after an
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 lesson. 66 per cent claimed that they felt happy during an
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 lesson.
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,
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 can cause the development of other skills. It usually has a good effect on the imagination of both
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 and adults. It
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 helps
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 become more creative, attentive and less demanding of themselves, because
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 does not have rules, so any work done in
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 classes can make
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 satisfied with their results.
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, I remember my friend, who used to take
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 lessons in her childhood. Now she has achieved success at her work,
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 she is not an artist.
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, her boss appreciates her for her ability always to invent something new and interesting for their company and come up with ideas which can considerably raise sales of the enterprise. In conclusion,
children
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 should study
art
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 at
school
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 for it has a lot of positive effects on their sense of well-being and can help develop skills necessary not only for artists.

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