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You recently bought an electric gadget for your home. Your friend wants the same gadget and needs your advice. In this letter you should include: What the gadget is What you think about it Advice about other alternatives your friend could buy

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Dear Sam, I hope you are doing well. I received your letter and was delighted to know that you are planning to procure the same
soup
 maker as mine.
Last
 weekend the electric
soup
 maker was delivered
at
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 my place by Amazon. The appliance prepares 1.5 litres of vegetable
soup
 at a time. The automated function is simple, it chops the vegetables, steams, and blends
it
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them
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 into hot piping
soup
. It has two modes, smooth type
or
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of
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 chunky type which can be selected as per individual preference. It’s portable
however
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 difficult to clean after use. Since I can now consume lip-smacking
soup
everyday
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 without having any stress to prepare it
,
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 because it gets done unattended and saves
incredible
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 amount of my time.
Moreover
, I have been maintaining a healthy lifestyle, and by using
this
 device nutrients are added to my meals. You may consider a few other options like
eletric
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electric
 blender or
stemo
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stems
stem
stereo
 too as it has similar operations at a lower price.
Infact
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In fact
, it can be used to prepare other food items like cake batter or boiled eggs too. Let me know if you need any
further
 assistance. Regards, Devika
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For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

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