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Some people say History is one of the most important school subjects. Other people think taht in today's world subjects like Science and technology are more important than history. Discuss both views and give your own opinion. Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant example forrm your own knowledge or experience.

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There is a contentious debate over the
subject
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 taught in school that
history
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 is one of the most important subjects while other people think in today's world, The weightage of subjects like Science and technology should be more than
history
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subject
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. I opine that Science & technology and
History
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 both move hand in hand. In fact, they are dependent on one another by discussing
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relatable with appropriate examples.
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 with,
history
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 is a crucial
subject
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 for the students to buildup
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 relations with the past resulting in
strong
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 foundation.
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, the development of civilization with immense strength and how language developed eventually into the script by
initially
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 engraving the drawings on a rock were the key features.
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, The UNESCO World heritage sites
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 conspicuous results that the way language
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 was pretty much the same that we use now.
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,
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Science and technology have become advanced
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that
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is
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 suppressing the importance of
history
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. Despite
of
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people are overwhelmed are now relying on the facts that follow the ancient principles for solutions.
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, nowadays the students want to approach
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an
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artificial intelligence by learning computers as it is a lucrative field that attracts many students as carrier perspectives are in turn used to follow a well-established rule. In conclusion, both the learnings are important to make a well-defined carrier path as certain practical
implementation
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 have to be reversed in future which requires
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a tool
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tool
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 to
dug
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 up the historical methods. I opine that the Pupil should be taught every
subject
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 with equal importance by imparting the most important information.
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