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Some people believe that unpaid community service should be a compulsory part of high school programs. For example the neighborhood or teaching to younger children. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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I
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It
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 has been suggested that high schools
to
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be involved with the community
services
 by exerting it in programs.
However
, some schools and colleges had already added voluntary work for
students
. I strongly support the idea and will illustrate
further
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it further
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 in
this
 essay
by
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with
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 different examples. Apart from
the
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apply
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education, there are numerous
skills
 that a student needs to learn in his teenage.
For instance
, communication, managerial, and
time
 management
skills
. One can not just learn these
skills
 being a part of community
services
 but
also
to
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use them in practical life. To elucidate, currently, most
of
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apply
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the youngsters waste their
time
 by watching
Television
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television
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, using social networking sites and unnecessary
us
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use
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 if internet.
Therefore
, being
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a volunteer
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volunteer
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volunteers
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 in
such
services
those
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they
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 can utilize their
time
 properly by learning from people, helping others and
consequently
implement
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implementing
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in
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it in
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 their
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own
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ow
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own
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 lives as well. Moving on, once the youngsters are bound to perform work with charitable organizations, they will get an opportunity to think creatively in their other projects. Those
skills
 will
also
 create a great impression by mentioning
on
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apply
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their CVs.
Further
,
students
 will get to know the value of money and spend wisely
instead
in
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of in
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a
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an
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 extravagant way.
Moreover
,
healthy
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a healthy
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lifestyle
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life style
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lifestyle
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 has been strongly recommended by health
centers
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centres
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. So, keeping the
students
 busy in extracurricular activities makes them fit and energetic.
Additionally
, it could
also
 help them to restrain from unhealthy activities or ideas that can be dangerous to themselves and society.
In contrast
, in
humankind
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,humankind
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 there are
such
 persons exists who oppose
to
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apply
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the idea because they believe
students
 should focus on their studies
instead
 of wasting
time
 by joining community
services
centers
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centres
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. In conclusion, I believe
this
 would be
great
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a great
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 idea and soon would be
the
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apply
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part of high
schools
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school
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 or
colleges
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college
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 programs.
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