Writing task 1 The charts give information about the diet and general health of two groups of students. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
The two pie charts show data on five different diets which are fish, cereals,fruit,vegetables and food with a
high fat
content Add a hyphen
high-fat
while
the table gives information of
general wellness and attendance at Change preposition
on
classes
of two categories of students
(group
A and group
B
). It is measured in percentage.
Overall
, it is evident that group
B
students
has
Change the verb form
have
higher
rate of consumption of food with a Add an article
a higher
high fat
content Add a hyphen
high-fat
with
poor health and low attendance at Change preposition
apply
classes
while
group
A students
attended classes
more.
To begin
, group
A ingest
cereals of about 35% which is Change the verb form
ingests
also
the same ratio of cereals in group
B
. There is high consumption of food with a high fat
content of approximately Add a hyphen
high-fat
a
half in Correct article usage
apply
group
B
. However
, 30% in group
A. Group
A students
eat 22% of vegetables while
one
in twenty in group
B
. Moreso, Fish, fruit had the same ratio in group
A and group
B
of about one
in twenty, although
, 8% of fruit in group
A.
Furthermore
, looking at the table, group
A has low
rate Add an article
a low
in
poor health,Change preposition
of
that is
, the case of overweight and illness in the last
year was about one
in ten and one
in twenty respectively. Additionally
, majority
of them Correct article usage
the majority
of
about 90% attended Change preposition
apply
classes
in school. In contrast
, 75% attended classes
and 20% of overweight as well as
12% of illness
in the past year in Replace the word
ill
group
B
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words classes, students, group, b, one with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "table" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "ratio" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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