Writing task 1 The charts give information about the diet and general health of two groups of students. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

Writing task 1

The charts give information about the diet and general health of two groups of students.

Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
The two pie charts show data on five different diets which are fish, cereals,fruit,vegetables and food with a
high fat
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content
while
the table gives information
of
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on
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general wellness and attendance at
classes
of two categories of
students
(
group
A and
group
B
). It is measured in percentage.
Overall
, it is evident that
group
B
students
has
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higher
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a higher
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rate of consumption of food with a
high fat
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content
with
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poor health and low attendance at
classes
while
group
A
students
attended
classes
more.
To begin
,
group
A
ingest
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cereals of about 35% which is
also
the same ratio of cereals in
group
B
. There is high consumption of food with a
high fat
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content of approximately
a
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half in
group
B
.
However
, 30% in
group
A.
Group
A
students
eat 22% of vegetables
while
one
in twenty in
group
B
. Moreso, Fish, fruit had the same ratio in
group
A and
group
B
of about
one
in twenty,
although
, 8% of fruit in
group
A.
Furthermore
, looking at the table,
group
A has
low
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a low
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rate
in
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of
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poor health,
that is
, the case of overweight and illness in the
last
year was about
one
in ten and
one
in twenty respectively.
Additionally
,
majority
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of them
of
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about 90% attended
classes
in school.
In contrast
, 75% attended
classes
and 20% of overweight
as well as
12% of
illness
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ill
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in the past year in
group
B
.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
Vocabulary: Replace the words classes, students, group, b, one with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "table" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "ratio" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 4 times.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • dietary patterns
  • nutritional intake
  • carbohydrates
  • proteins
  • fast food consumption
  • health indicators
  • diet quality
  • beverages
  • sugary drinks
  • health outcomes
  • obesity
  • physical activity
  • fatigue
  • health maintenance
  • anomalies
  • trends
  • balance
  • comparison
  • correlation
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