More and more people are moving away from an agricultural background to relocate to cities in order to look for job. What will be the consequences of this? What solutions can you offer?

There is
increase
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in
migration
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the migration
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rate
whereby many
people
move from rural
areas
to urban
areas
for the sake of
Job
seeking.
At
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the
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a
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result of
this
, there will be overpopulation and
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increase
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crime
rate
in the municipal
areas
.
However
, the government can provide
job
opportunity
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opportunities
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as well as effective security.
To begin
with, overpopulation is one of the effects that can occur. To make
this
more
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clearer, when
majority
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the majority
a majority
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of
people
vacate their base to the
city
, there will be
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an increase
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increase
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rate
of
people
living in the
city
which leads to overcrowding.
For instance
, there is a particular
city
in Nigeria called Lagos which is located
in
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southwest
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the southwest
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of
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Nigeria, the
city
comprises
of
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many individuals because
if
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of
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its
job
opportunity
to
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for
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people
.
However
, the
city
is known as
overcrowded
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the overcrowded
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city
in Nigeria.
In addition
,
crime
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the crime
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rate
will
increase
.
This
is because,
people
relocate to greener pastures in order to earn money but if they cannot get employment, they tend to involve in an illegal
act
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acts
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so as to provide cash to feed themselves.
Furthermore
, there are
plethora
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a plethora
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of possible measures.
Firstly
, the government should provide
job
opportunities for
people
living in countryside
areas
.
This
means,
if
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that if
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there is enough work that can shelter
for
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their needs,
this
will reduce them relocating to
city
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the city
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for employment. It will as well prevent overcrowding in the urban area. Another measure is that
,
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there should be
provision
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the provision
a provision
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of enough security agencies in order to punish anyone who
involve
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in
crime
which will
also
deter
people
from engaging in any illegal
act
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activity
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. In conclusion,
majority
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the majority
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of
people
keep leaving their area for
better
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a better
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standard of living especially to earn funds.
However
,
this
can lead to overcrowding and
crime
rate
which can
be combat
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be combated
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by providing
job
opportunities for
people
and
employ
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employing
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more security agencies.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • urbanization
  • overcrowding
  • public services
  • housing shortages
  • informal settlements
  • rural depopulation
  • agricultural production
  • local economies
  • environmental degradation
  • pollution
  • waste management
  • green spaces
  • job market saturation
  • underemployment
  • infrastructure
  • public utilities
  • cultural heritage
  • traditional cultures
  • urban lifestyles
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