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An increasing number of professionals, such as doctors and teachers,are leaving their own poorer countries to work in developed countries. What problems does this cause? What solutions can you suggest to deal with this situation?

The rate at which professionals like doctors and teachers are migrating from their own under-developed countries to work in a developed nation is on the increase.
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 number of professionals and Regular recruitment. There are a number of solutions to tackle
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 of the problems of migration of licensed
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 is
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number
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 of doctors and teachers.
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 increased movement to
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other states
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 especially doctors has led to the long waiting cue in the hospital where
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 doctor has to attend to thousands of clients thereby causing delay and exhaustion on the health care providers.
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, in most teaching hospitals, persons who went to the clinic, spent the whole day without
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 attended to.
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,
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 prognosis due to
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 to receive early intervention. Another issue is regular recruitment
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 teachers which will affect students learning ability by trying to get
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to a new teacher always, resulting
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 poor performance.
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,there are suggestions to proffer remedies to
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,
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 the system,
government
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 should build
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standard schools and hospitals,
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 equipping
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 with all the required equipment that it needs which in turn makes teaching and act of care and treating clients an easy
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, if our
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schools and hospitals are up to standard,the rate of people
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 out to enjoy the ambience that comes with good structures
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will
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 thereby resulting in economic growth.
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, is
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remuneration
 for workers. If salaries are increased, health insurance provided,
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 leave and leave allowances put in place,
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 will not only help them take care of themselves and
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their families
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,
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 but will
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 way in the development of our nation. In Conclusion,
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the relocation
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 of workers in search of greener pastures has caused
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the exacerbation
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 of illness
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 not been attended to as at when due.
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 increase in salaries and standard infrastructures will reduce
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 effect to an extent.

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Answer the 'Problem and Solution' topic

Problem-and-solution essays fall naturally into two parts, the first describing and exploring the problem, the second setting out the solution or solutions.

You essay structure should look something like this:

  • Introduction
  • Body paragraph 1 – Problems
  • Body paragraph 2 – Solutions
  • Conclusion

Examples to start your body paragraph:

  • One of the first problems of the...
  • Another problem that needs to be considered...
  • A possible solution to this problem would be...
  • One immediate practical solution is to...

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Brain drain
  • Skilled professionals
  • Healthcare systems
  • Education systems
  • Economic growth
  • Dependency on foreign aid
  • Social inequality
  • Quality healthcare
  • Quality education
  • Retain talent
  • International cooperation
  • Sustainable growth
  • Scholarships
  • Professional development
  • Remote work capabilities
  • Local research funding
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