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Some people think that instead of preventing climate change, we need to find a way to live with it. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

#people #climate #change
Over the
last
 two or three decades, the world was upgraded with globalization, urbanization and industrialization. Due to
this
,
environment
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 is affected
moreover
, a lot of changes
are
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occured
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occurred
 in the
climate
.
However
, some people argue that
instead
 of saving the environment, we have to know the factors to with it. I completely opine
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 statement and forwarded
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 my perception. To commence with, owing to Globalization,
climate
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the climate
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 was changed and temperatures were raised on the earth and oceans. In fact,
climate
 change occurs due to Global warming by
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greenhouse
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green house
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greenhouse
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 gases
such
 as methane, carbon dioxide, fuel burning, and carbon monoxide.
Moreover
, everyone has the responsibility to save the country without affecting
environment
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the environment
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. Because, if we do not prevent the
climate
then
 future generations, animals and species would get into trouble.
On the other hand
,
climate
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 was being changed by pollution, deforestation and
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greenhouse
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green house
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greenhouse
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 gases. Nowadays, most
of
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the people are using vehicles to go anywhere
then
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 release of
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greenhouse
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green house
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greenhouse
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 gases are being increased.
Nevertheless
, I think people without having vehicles is impossible to do anything. Even though finding
right
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 solution to prevent nature,
it
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is not being worked. Because, one clear example is that
the
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plastic usage was banned but still public
are
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 using plastic items
such
 as covers, bottles, and boxes.
As a result
, living species
such
 as birds, animals, and humans might be in danger.
Instead
 of
this
, Government should have to follow rules against man-made actions.
Moreover
,
public
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 should encourage electric vehicles, and natural energy resources
such
 as solar, tidal, and wind energy. In conclusion, the Government should bring a tax on causing environmental disasters like pollution, and deforestation to save
earth
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instead
 of finding a solution.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • climate change
  • prevent
  • adaptation
  • mitigation
  • cope with
  • effects
  • shift
  • mindset
  • lifestyle
  • balance
  • invest
  • research
  • technology
  • crucial
  • education
  • awareness
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