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Some people believe that schools should teach foreign languages for primary school children. Do the advantages outweigh disadvantages?

#people #schools #languages #school #children
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new born
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mother
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their mother
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 tongue after his born
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 is because her
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introduce
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 everything surrounding her. There are split opinions regarding, multiple
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 learning. Some believe that junior high
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 is the best to learn
overseas
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, whereas another group of thinkers support
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, both have their own pros and cons.
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, before commenting on my decision, both
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opinion would be discussed. Explaining the former opinion, the primary
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 the supporters would put forward is the study of
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the non
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non native
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language
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toddlers is more comfortable.
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 5 to 10 years kids are like
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statue
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 and it is helpful for the tutor to teach them any
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 other than
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tounge
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tongue
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 a
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 kid almost learnt his
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study
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different languages at the same time is
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easy.
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, the latter view suggests that high
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children
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 are good at learning outside
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 because they are mature enough than kids
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study
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 of new
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 after
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junior
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 is more difficult for every student.
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 is just similar to our habits and it includes in our daily communication. In fact, a small kid is
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 fast learner.
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, they do not understand the real meaning of words,
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less
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 ideas about to make correct
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. In spite of
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 practice daily not
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to get admission
in
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abroad only for fun. To conclude and give my opinion , I would say that
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is always rely
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 on
atmosphere
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 and the junior
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 is the more appropriate age for the kids to understand, read and write any overseas communication. In the big picture,
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both students and teachers.
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Answer the 'Advantages and Disadvantages' topic

IELTS advantages and disadvantages questions normally give you a statement and ask you to comment on the advantages and disadvantages of that statement.

Answer structure for the type of essay

  • Introduction
  • Body paragraph 1 – advantages
  • Body paragraph 2 – disadvantages
  • Conclusion

Examples to start your body paragraph:

  • The main advantage is...
  • The disadvantage of this...
  • The main benefit...
  • Despite these advantages...
  • One possible drawback...

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