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The bar chart below illustrates the popularity of
transportation
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 among the youth in four different countries. As is shown clearly in the graph,
car
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the car
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 is the most popular
transportation
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 tool for young people in UK, USA and France, while the young Germans are more environment-friendly. In Britain, America and France, the usage of car accounts for the largest portion of the ways which the youngers commute, at 60%, 60% and over 70% respectively.
Bike
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The bike
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 is the
second
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 choice for the same group of people in Britain and France, with the share of 29% and 15%.
However
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, a contrary trend can be noticed in
USA
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the USA
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, whereas the motorcycle gains more preference than
bicycle
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a bicycle
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, and accounts for 30
percentage
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. The
transportation
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 pattern for Germany is completely different. The leading way of
transportation
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 is riding
bicycle
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a bicycle
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 and it represents around 45%, which is the highest in the same category. Meanwhile, travelling by car makes up 40% of total commute ways.
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, the use of
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motorcycle
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motorcycles
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 is the lowest in German, with only 15%.
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    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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