Many people are exercising less. Some people say that by watching major sport events on television such as the Olympics, people can be encouraged to exercise. Others say there are other ways to encourage people to exercise. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

Contrary to popular belief,
people
who work out
regaluraly
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regularly
are on the rise due to watching athletes playing
sports
on the internet and television.
However
, not all
sport
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sports
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event attendees want to
excercise
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exercise
and prefer to just cheer
their
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favorite
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team. On the one hand, many high school students are aiming to pursue
physical
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activity as their university degree. Physical activity is taught in most schools. Most pupils get excited in
sports
period because they would like to be footballers or even famous gold medal
olympists
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Olympics
Olympians
. Some would train about three hours daily.
On the other hand
, not all
people
are encouraged to work out by watching
sports
. Some
excerise
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exercise
exercises
to lose weight, while others are afraid to become diabetic. I think that
people
should make
excercising
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exercising
a habit, regardless if they watch
sports
or not since it has numerous benefits. In conclusion, many
people
made working out a hobby, others work out to be a famous
athlete
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. Whether
one
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you
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excercise
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exercise
exercises
as a hobby or for fun, you will benefit your body and well-being.
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