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Some people say that supermarkets and manufacturers have a responsibility to reduce the amount of packaging on products they sell. Others believe that it is the consumer’s responsibility to avoid buying products which have a lot of packaging. Discuss both views and give your opinions.

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Nowadays, there has been a widespread argument that reducing a bunch of
product's
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product
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 coverages are
responsibility
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the responsibility
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 of hypermarkets and factories. While others think that packaging is
consumer's
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the consumer's
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 fault. I will discuss both views and give my own opinions. On the one hand, either supermarkets or big manufacturers contribute to
mass
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the mass
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 production of commercial goods. They
waste
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 much even for one production, from
single
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a single
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 pack as the
first
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 layer until the bigger packaging to
load
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 the dozen of it.
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, if in a day the factory makes 1000 cookies, it will use the same
amount
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 of plastics to cover it.
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, after the products are distributed to
supermarket
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the supermarket
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, customer consumes more plastics to carry their groceries. As a consequence, if there
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 200 buyers
come
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 to
supermarket
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the supermarket
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 and each of them did not bring their own bag, the
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 of litter would increase as well
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, the
amount
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 of
waste
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 is supported by the number of
customer
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customers
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, the more people buy products, the worsen.
Life-style
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Lifestyle
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 may become one of the
reason
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reasons
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 why the number of
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 increased.
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, K-Pop fans compete to buy
stuffs
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stuff
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 based on their idol's endorsement.
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, in some cases, panic buying causes the
amount
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 of
waste
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 significantly
rise
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.
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, in
pandemic
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a pandemic
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 situation, people consume more instant food to avoid social interaction. To conclude, I believe that hypermarkets and factories tend to produce more
product's
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product
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 coverages rather than personal
consumtions
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consumption
consumptions
.
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, it can be reduced by strict regulations or policies from the government.
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