The charts below show the changes in ownership of electrical appliances and amount of time spent doing housework in households in one country between 1920 and 2019. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The charts provide information about the changes in ownership of electrical appliances and the amount of time spent doing housework in households in a country between 1920 and 2019. If we look at the graphs closely, we will notice that
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the percentage of households with electrical appliances didn't fall since 1920 except for washing machines.
On the other hand
, housework hours didn't increase till 2019.
Refrigerator
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and vacuum
cleaner
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using
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the amount of percentage constantly growing. After 2000, both appliances using every
households
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until 2019, but only
refrigerator
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met 100% from 1980. At the same time, in the graph, washing machines line something different.
Although
it is growing from 1920 after that year it is decreasing till 1980 and after ,that it is growing without falling until 2019. In the
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graph of housework per week
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from 1920 to 1960 so fast, which is 50% to move at 20%. Even after
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it is still falling, but the amount was not huge. ,
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in 2019, the number of hours per week stands at 10%.
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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 87%.
Vocabulary: The word "graphs" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "fall" was used 3 times.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • household appliances
  • time-efficient
  • labour-saving devices
  • technological innovations
  • ownership rate
  • housework chores
  • domestic workload
  • automation
  • advancements
  • trend analysis
  • societal shifts
  • economic impact
  • durability
  • lifespan of appliances
  • maintenance
  • historical comparison
  • time allocation
  • drudgery reduction
  • energy consumption
  • disruption in trends
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