Prompt: As compared to the past, children these days spend more of their leisure time indoors with computers and TV and less time outdoors. Describe some of the problems this lack of outdoor leisure time can cause and suggest at least one possible solution. You should write at least 250 words.

Contrary to the past, the

kids

of

this

generation

are have

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a tendency to waste most of their free

time

indoors with electronic equipment

included

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computers and TV as opposed to outdoor extracurricular and recreational activities. From my personal perspective,

children

should always be encouraged to go out and indulge in physical

activites

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activities

rather than staying at home or playing loads of games, though it can be reversed by parental supervision. It can be seen that there are a pile of delinquencies that stem from abusing too much

time

for electronic machines,

such

as eye problems, stress, and obesity while some can cause mental

issuses

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issues

as well, that can be a serious consequence why

children

getting discouraged from going outside and meet others.

Moreover

, it might negatively impact multiple aspects of life consisting

of

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education unless the

kids

encouraged

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from being social at an early age. There is no denying the use of computers or TV, but it

also

causes many psychological delinquencies. It is

extraggeration

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exaggeration

that these problems are sorely life-threatening in tandem with affecting school, leisure

time

and social later on. From that point, our living

standard

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will have

tendency

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to extremely decrease. Why there

are

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a throng of solution submitted, I believed that the most possible and

pratical

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practical

solution to

this

would be to incorporate a free

time

in school where our boys and girls must be taken outside and show their gift in outdoor activities. exposing the

kids

to team sports can be

great

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powerful influence on their social life by allowing them to work as a partner in a team. Parents should

also

take it upon as

a

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incredible tool to make their

kids

involve

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in exterior activities, and

measure

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could be taken to ensure that

children

has

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enough both physical exercise and extracurricular activity. In a words, having thought about

this

issue in some depth, I have come to the conclusion that having

a recreational outdoor leisure times

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recreational outdoor leisure times

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is a key to

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excessive screen

time

and

ensure

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betterment. Schools and parents should listen and understand

this

significance firsthand

,

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and must put an effort

in

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imparting

this

know-now to the

children

.