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Some people prefer activities and lifestyles in hot climates while others prefer ‎activities and lifestyles in cold climates. Discuss both views, and give your ‎opinion.‎

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The bar chart illustrates the investigation of Australian people's habits of consumption of
coffee
 and tea. Generally, inhabitants in
Adelaide
 were willing to buy instant
coffee
, while people in the other four areas liked to go to cafes. As is shown clearly in the graph, city residents who went to cafes for
coffee
 or tea account for the largest share in Sydney, Melbourne, Brisbane and Hobart, at 61%, 64%, 55% and 63% respectively. It is noteworthy that the
second
-largest portion of the cost was instant
coffee
 in the
last
 4 weeks in these four cities.
Moreover
, the fraction of people who drank fresh
coffee
 was the smallest in both these four places and
Adelaide
, all of them were below 45
percentages
Replace the word
per cent
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. A contrary trend could be found when we examine
Adelaide
, the instant
coffee
 took the largest market share and was just 1% higher than the population who enjoyed beverages in the
coffee
 shops.
Further
, all these three categories in
Adelaide
 were no more than 50%.
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