The graphs below show the enrolments of overseas students and local students in Australian universities over a ten year period. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The graphs below show the enrolments of overseas students and local students in Australian universities over a ten year period.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The graphs compared the numbers of overseas
students
and local
students
who studied in Australian universities from 2001 to 2010. In general, both overseas and local
students
showed a steady increase over the period. The commencing number of overseas
students
was around 10,000 in 2001, but 2009 saw a dramatic
growth
to reach approximately 40,000. There was
a
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fourfold number of overseas
students
increased during the decade. Turning to local
students
, the numbers of local
students
fluctuated, but
overall
there was a small but steady
growth
from about around 180,000 in 2001 to 200,000 in 2010. Moving
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the number of total
students
, there was significant
growth
in the overseas
students
, which was 20,000 in 2001 and eventually over 80,000 in 2010, with fourfold increases in total. Local
students
revealed huge
growth
between 2001 to 2007
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200,000 in total.
However
, it remained unchanged from 2007 to 2010, at 600,000.
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