Some people think that instead of preventing climate change, we need to find a way to live with it. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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of trying to stop climate change, we should learn to live with it. I completely disagree with

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statement, because

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issue is having a huge effect on the environment and we have to come up with ways to reduce it before it does serious

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to our planet. It is true that

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developments will cause the loss of traditional cultures. I agree with

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view because technology doesn't seem to be affecting other cultures. It is true that the definition behind

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and religious

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has been forgotten by many

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since nowadays most

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only want to enjoy themselves.

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having a good time, I completely disagree with the

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of these festivals being forgotten.(all these festivals have special meanings and should not be forgotten) In

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countries, a small

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of

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earn extremely high salaries. While it is the belief of some

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is beneficial for the country, I believe that salaries should be kept at a certain level.(everybody deserves equal pay) It is believed that an academic degree leads to future

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opportunities. I agree with the given assertion while there are

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some other underlying reasons involved in

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respect. I agree with the view that the importance of academic qualifications to find a good

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cannot be ignored. It seems that university graduates are more likely to be recruited by other companies.

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to say, businesses show

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to employ staff with academic backgrounds

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since they have had theoretical information which is a basic need to start a career. Take a young person who has recently graduated, and had learned a various array of subjects related to his academic field as an example;

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leads him to find

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with more favourable revenue.

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, there are contributing factors that can be considered beneficial to

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a more satisfying

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, if individuals attend courses related to their field to attain experience, they are more likely to be welcomed by more firms.

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, personal quality is an element that by no

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cannot be neglected. More precisely, those who work on their personal characteristics

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as being well-mannered, responsible, and hardworking are more likely to be far more successful in the

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market, and employers place a premium on

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workforce. To conclude, I agree that having a satisfactory

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requires academic qualifications, practical skills as well as productive qualities.