Some people say that music is a good way of bringing people of different cultures and ages together. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion?
Nowadays,
music
plays a significant role in many people
individual's life. Some people
support that music
can express many
cultural and historical information to Replace the quantifier
much
different
Add an article
a different
group
of Fix the agreement mistake
groups
people
, whereas others argue that music
is just music
. In this
essay, I will briefly discuss the factor why I agree with this
statement and give my own opinion.
To begin
with, it is Add an article
a plan
the plan
plan
to see that Correct your spelling
plain
many
classic Replace the quantifier
much
music
from Change to a plural noun
musics
early
generation Correct article usage
the early
have
been circulated Change the verb form
has
to
nowadays. Change preposition
apply
Those
Change the determiner
That music
music
not only preserve their attractive melody and street music
but also
influence the
modern Correct article usage
apply
music
recently.For example
, there are many singer
Change to a plural noun
singers
use
the classic Correct pronoun usage
who use
music
rhythm to cover a catchy modern
Remove the article
catchy modern music
a piece of catchy modern music
music
.
In more detail, music
is a symbol of many traditions and ancient stories. Many traditional festivals have a symbolic song like "We wish you a merry
Christmas". Those songs Change the capitalization
Merry
widespread
Add a missing verb
are widespread
to
any corner of the world, and let Change preposition
in
the
both Eastern and Western countries celebrate together. Remove the article
apply
In addition
, some traditional song's
lyrics Fix the agreement mistake
songs'
is
made Change the verb form
are
by
a specific language. Change preposition
in
For instance
, some elders who are a
Taiwanese indigenous population will teach Correct article usage
the
young
generation how to sing Correct article usage
the young
the
traditional songs. Correct article usage
apply
Therefore
, their language and story will not be lost simply.
On the other hand
, some people
think that playing a
Remove the article
music
a piece of music
music
is just a habit for them. Consequently
, they disagree with too much complex meaning on
Change preposition
in
music
because they only want to enjoy the music
in a
easy way.
To sum up, it seems that Change the article
an
music
toward
everyone Change preposition
for
have
various meaning in their thought. From where I stand, I strongly agree that Change the verb form
has
music
can collaborate all people
in the world. Music
is like a
invincible history book which Change the article
an
convey
Change the verb form
conveys
people
's memory through modern
world. While Add an article
the modern
people
enjoying
the song in their leisure time, it is better to think deeply about the story Wrong verb form
enjoy
behind
.Correct pronoun usage
itbehind
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