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completing university education is thought by smoe to be the best way to get a good job. On the other hand other think that getting experience and developing softskills is more important. discuss both views and give your opinion

#university #education #smoe #job #hand #softskills
The map shows the alterations that have been done to a park in 1980 and the present day. Overall, it is evident that both the gates are removed and a curve path with the additional roads on the northern and eastern sides has come into existence.
Although
 the pond remains in the same place, some recreational development has come into existence
such
 as a playground and a cafe.
To begin
 with, The park is converted into an open park as the gates are removed. In the west, even though the pond is in the same place, a bench is added. Just below the benches, the area that was covered by flowerbeds in 1980 is now converted into wild bushes.
Nevertheless
, there is no significant change is seen on the northwest side. Taking into consideration the eastern side, a playground for children has been constructed in the place of flowers.
Further
, in the northeast corner, there is a decline in the number of trees and the area is allocated to an outdoor cafe where people can get food and drinks.
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