Many manufactured food and drink products contain high levels of sugar, which causes many health problems. Sugary products should be made more expensive to encourage people to consume less sugar. Do you agree or disagree?

There is no doubt nowadays that commercially manufactured
food
and drinks contain huge levels of
sugar
and it causes so many
health
problems. These
products
should not be banned, but they should include high prices to encourage
people
to consume less. At present, so many
people
depend on manufactured
food
and drink.
That is
why
this
type of business become popular and more and more
people
are used to
this
type of
food
and beverage items, which have high levels of
sugar
.
On the other hand
,
this
kind of
food
contains low prices.
People
heavily eat and drink it for less price and availability. But our huge depending on
this
type of
food
, we suffer a lot of
health
problems, especially for
sugar
. For that reason, I agree with the statement, which is sugary
products
should be more expensive to consume less. Everyone knows that, and
also
doctors suggest to
sugar
is unusually for our
health
. So many diseases and
health
problems we face of that. But
people
don't focus now on it. Day by day
people
is more engaged with high sugary
products
. I think the main reason behind
this
trend is less price and accessibility. Anyone could buy these
products
anywhere.
Although
everyone knows that, it is not useful for our
health
, most
people
are used to
this
. If these
products
have a high price,
people
do not buy
this
without an emergency or unfamiliar situation. Not only
people
do not buy these
products
before like but, they
also
could not buy some the
people
. So, in a nutshell,
people
do not buy
this
Change the determiner
this product
these products
show examples
products
regularly, if it is an expensive
products
Change the noun form
product
show examples
,
that is
why I believe that sugary
products
should be made more expensive to encourage
people
to consume less
sugar
.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • health problems
  • manufactured food and drink products
  • sugary products
  • excessive sugar consumption
  • discourage
  • promote
  • healthier choices
  • reduce
  • increased taxes
  • fund
  • health education
  • prevention programs
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