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Some people think that foreign visitors should be charged more than locals when they visit cultural and tourist attractions in a country. To what extent do you agree with this view?

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Due to globalization, the number of
people
 travelling overseas for
tourism
 is gradually increasing. Some
people
 claim that authorities should collect more fare from them than local citizens when they visit monuments and sights. I disagree with
this
 viewpoint as it not only creates
financial
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burden
 on visitors but
also
 leads to discrimination. To commence with, increasing ticket prices add
additional
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an additional
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 financial
burden
 on international travellers. They spend
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hard-earned
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hard earned
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 money to book flights, hotels, and food which are already
an
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expensive to motivate them to
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come back
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comeback
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come back
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 again and promote
nations
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national
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tourism
 policymakers should not
rise
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raise
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 entrance fees.
Moreover
, when
people
 from developing countries visit western developed nations any small change in charges is a huge difference due to
currency
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 exchange rate.
As a result
,
number
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 of overseas visitors
increase
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increases
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 over
the
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time.
In addition
 to financial
burden
, price difference leads to
a
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racism. Foreign nationals may sue local administrators for discriminating based on their location.
For instance
, In 2006,
Basde
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Based
 on
complaint
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the complaint
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, the USA government prohibited
tourism
 to
the
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Cuba as they charging high prices for the US nationals.
Thus
, It is better
to
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not to hike fees
at
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in
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first
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the first
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 place
instead
 of making
this
as
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a national issue.
Finally
, to recapitulate, some
people
 argue that governments should
colled
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 more charges from foreign travellers for visiting ancient constructions and landscapes. Personally, it impacts
tourism
 due to the aforementioned reasons
such
 as more financial
burden
 and discrimination.
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