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with the coming of digital education, some people believe that trend of traditional studies may fall down. Discuss both views and give your opinion

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It is commonly believed that
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 of learning from online
education
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education
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education
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matched with
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digital
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However
, I shall discuss both these notions along with a rational conclusion.
Firstly
, these days online
education
 is being played a significant role in learners because it gives more
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convenient
convinient
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convenient
additionally
 we can learn by sitting at home globally without any boundaries through e-apps
such
 as zoom, google meeting and skype. One clear example is that, in covid-19 period government
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 to open
instituitions
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institutions
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 tutors and students to run the classes. Even though digital learning has more advantages, it is not suitable
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 all especially children and high school youngsters.
On the other hand
, traditional studying will not be fallen down due to e-learning because it gives clarity and
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Moreover
, people can easily grab the
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 attention because it provides face-to-face coaching
then
 we can easily learn anything.
For instance
, if
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learners are being had
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doubts
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 they would quickly understand the concepts.
However
, youngsters are being learnt discipline, respect, and humanities through
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class room
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 learning.
Additionally
, it builds
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relationship
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 between mentors and youth. To sum up, gaining
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knowledge
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online would not learn everything and I believe that cultural studies never
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 the digital classes. These days, building disciplines are mandatory to know to avoid crimes
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 and scams in
this
 society so classroom teaching is important to everyone.
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