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As the world population increases, genetically modified crops are becoming essential to meet rising demands for food. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

#world #population #increases #crops #demands #food
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Over the past decades, global
food
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 shortages
had
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 been a problem
to
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for
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 many
countries
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 all over the world. Some believe that, with the
increase
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 number of population, genetically modified
crops
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 are becoming important to meet consumers’
demand
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. I largely agree
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 the statement,
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, there is another
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 that can
also
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practiced
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 to solve the issue. Modifying a plant’s gene by transforming its DNA could reduce the chances of the
crops
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to be
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 infected by
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.
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, seedling
diseases
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 are very common in plants
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 as corn and wheat and these conditions may cause
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 reduction in the yield. When
DNA
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the DNA
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 of the plants that are susceptible to
diseases
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 are changed, more
crops
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 that are resistant to
diseases
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 are grown. Eventually, there is
higher
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 yield and the production may satisfy consumers’
demand
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.
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, the availability and cost of genetically modified technology can be a concern in certain
countries
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. The technology is handled by multinational companies
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 as Bayer and may not be accessible to
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world
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countries
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.
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, transportation is needed to export the corps and
food
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 to
countries
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such
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 as India and Bangladesh as these
countries
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 may not be supplied with
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 innovations.
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, the cost to run the
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 can be high and government may need to invest
al
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 large amount of money on it. The
government
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governments
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 of Iran and Afghanistan,
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, may not be capable
to allocate
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high
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 amount of money
on
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this
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 technology.
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,
it is clear that
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this
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system
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 can be expensive and not easy to
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. The vertical farming
system
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 is another way of producing
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a certain
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 amount of
food
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 that may meet the
demand
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 of the population on earth as it can produce
large
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a large
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 volume of
corps
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crops
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 and
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is
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easily accessed.
This
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system
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 can be installed
at
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in
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 urban
area
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areas
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 where it is accessible to consumers.
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,
customer
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customers
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 can obtain a large number of fresh vegetables from
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vertical farming
system
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 and it is convenient for consumers to buy the products. The availability of
food
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 is
very
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crucial in order to ensure that the global
food
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 shortages are solved. In conclusion, genetically modified
crops
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 are essential to meet the rising
demand
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of
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for
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food
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 all over the world,
however
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, there is
other
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another
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 method
such
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 as vertical farming that may have better advantages in order to satisfy the
increase
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 need
of
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for
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food
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 supply. Both
the
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technologies can be applied because of the benefits of high crop production.
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