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‘Social networking sites such as Facebook and Twitter are observed to have more negative effects than positive being more useful for the criminals than others. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

#sites #facebook #twitter #effects #criminals
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Social media like WhatsApp, Facebook and Twitter are seen to have more wrong effects
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 more helpful for criminals as compared to others. I
am agree
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 with the given statement . To commence with , people
across
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all over the globe used social networking sites for
latest
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the latest
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 updates and to know what is happening around the world. In
this
 contemporary world Facebook ,
Twitter
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and Twitter
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 makes
us
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life
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more easy
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 to do
each
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and everything more accurately
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compared to previous times.
Firstly
, while sitting freely at home we got to know the upcoming news around the world
for instance
 what is happening in Canada ,Australia and many other countries as well .
secondly
 , we can easily find the criminals from these networking sites if someone did the murder because individuals simultaneously posted the news on the Instagram so that
every one
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 is getting aware
from
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 these kinds of mishappenings going on
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moreover
 government should
also
 get to know what is happening in their country and protect these kinds of
corruption's
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corruptions
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 from their nation .
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 if we take a look
on
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negative
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the negative
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 effects the
first
 important thing is to banned on
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social media as china used to do China banned Facebook ,
tiktok
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TikTok
 and other apps so that the information from their origin is not spreading anywhere else . They do not want to
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share
sahre
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share
 the information with the other countries. To sum up , I concluded that there are more negative and positive aspects of the given topic it is the responsibility of the authorities to have a look
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this
 issue so that these things can be removed from our nation and
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the country
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 can run smoothly .
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Structure your answers in logical paragraphs

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A strong argument essay structure can be split up into 4 paragraphs, each containing 4 sentences (except the conclusion paragraph, which only contains 3 sentences).

Stick to this essay structure:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion

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