Film stars and celebrities often share their views on public matters that have little to do with their profession. Is this a positive or negative development?

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. It is obvious that there is more chance that famous actors and

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can express their opinions on public occasions they have nothing to do with. In my opinion, I believe it is a negative impact

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and movie stars are very popular among many

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their words have a huge influence which can create both positive and negative

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in all matters. Some stories are appropriate to be mentioned like sharing about a patient who wants

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the other hand, commenting on something they do not involved with and clearly know can lead to a misunderstanding among

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who usually share their opinion about

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as actors and singers, has many fans who admire their works, there is a chance that these fans stop supporting them due to their

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unrelated to their job which sometimes they are not satisfied with.

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not about their works, their fans will be bored and

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not support them as before. In conclusion,

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sharing their opinions can be beneficial to

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not their business can create a clash in their fanbase and a misunderstanding

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