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Film stars and celebrities often share their views on public matters that have little to do with their profession. Is this a positive or negative development?

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Nowadays, technology plays an important role to share
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an
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any
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 information with
other
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. It is obvious that there is more chance that famous actors and
celebrities
 can express their opinions on public occasions they have nothing to do with. In my opinion, I believe it is a negative impact
to
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 society and supporting reasons will be discussed in
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To begin
 with, It cannot be denied that
celebrities
 and movie stars are very popular among many
people
.
Although
 their words have a huge influence which can create both positive and negative
impact
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impacts
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, they are not
expert
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experts
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 in all matters. Some stories are appropriate to be mentioned like sharing about a patient who wants
a
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financial support.
In
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 the other hand, commenting on something they do not involved with and clearly know can lead to a misunderstanding among
people
.
For instance
, In my country, there are some
celebrities
 who usually share their opinion about
Thai
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 government.
Nevertheless
, whereas
this
 group of
people
,
such
 as actors and singers, has many fans who admire their works, there is a chance that these fans stop supporting them due to their
view
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views
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 on
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topic
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topics
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 unrelated to their job which sometimes they are not satisfied with.
For example
, If they often speak about topics which
is
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 not about their works, their fans will be bored and
finally
 not support them as before. In conclusion,
although
 famous
celebrities
 sharing their opinions can be beneficial to
people
, to comment on something which
are
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 not their business can create a clash in their fanbase and a misunderstanding
to
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in
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societies
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society
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.
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