Educating young people is naturally important, however some think government ought to invest more in education for adults in need. To what extent do you agree or disagree.

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it is known that learning and academic

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. An increase in the academic ability of younger children is important. The federal

government

should concentrate more on the younger population than the older citizens. In order to improve the academic standards, I am of the opinion that the federal

government

should focus more on the younger generation, than making efforts to improve the academic

performance

of the older citizens.

Teenagers

are the leaders of tomorrow. Investing in the younger generation tends to promote the economic standard of the

country

because they develop new technology that can promote the

country

.

However

, it is necessary for the

government

to train

teenagers

than older

adults

. It is said that the youths are the future of tomorrow. Both the

government

and parents are encouraged to promote the academic background of

teenagers

.

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instead

of the

government

paying attention to the

improvement

of the older adult's academic

performance

, there should be other ways to focus on

teenagers

' training so that they will have the best education. Examples, training 60 years on

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in school

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and giving them free education.

Then

allowing the

teenagers

to be uneducated. It is known that

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older

adults

have shorter life to live than

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teenagers

. So it is important to train them while young. And for

teenagers

to be great leaders tomorrow they need to be educated in order to meet the demands of the

country

. On

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,hand it is very important to train and improve the academic

performance

of a child

then

the

government

makes efforts to improve the academic standard of older

adults

.

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is known that the learning abilities and capabilities have decreased over the years. It is known that in the new age are new things. I think that investments made in the lives of

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teenager will tend to increase the economy of the nation in the future.

For example

, when the youths are empowered through academic

improvement

it enables them to make new investments and develop new technology.

This

improvement

leads to the development of the economy of the

country

. In conclusion, I agree that it is more profitable to improve the academic

performance

of

teenagers

than that of older

adults

in the present

country

.

This

makes the

country

have a brighter future and it

also

proves the economic standard of the

country

.